tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3582026116297290073.post3710392633689597091..comments2023-06-02T06:20:10.239-05:00Comments on branches: AmenBlakehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14537430116036306583noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3582026116297290073.post-77310867858702992972007-11-19T12:38:00.000-06:002007-11-19T12:38:00.000-06:00Talk about fapThe image you have created of a god ...Talk about fap<BR/><BR/>The image you have created of a god in this poem is phenomenal. I love that the speaker of your poem looks up toward the sky (as "mirrored pond" (7)) only to see himself looking down from above. So what does your speaker consider "the holiest nights?" (19). Are they ones when he is alone? Does he simply sit at home and fap (see “saintly appendages” (21))? Also, why is the “holy life” mentioned in the fourth line to be lived alone? Surely the god in your poem, albeit narcissistic, has friends and harems of women to fuel his boasts. Doesn’t everyone light their own vigils in the name of Narcissus? And if so how does doing so make your speaker alone?<BR/><BR/>The sentence structure in this poem is great and your use of imagery (as argument) is very effective (see. Middle of poem). <BR/><BR/>This poem is offensively self-aware and I love it.Blakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14537430116036306583noreply@blogger.com